Is this a good story??

Dear Santa,
My name is ...... I bet you already knew that. Christmas time is almost here once again. I remember my eleventh Christmas day very clearly. My mom woke me up around 9:00 am. As soon as I woke up I ran to the Christmas tree. But unfortunately I had to take a shower, brush my teeth and get dressed before I opened my Christmas presents. After I did all that my whole family and I gathered around the Christmas tree. This was my favorite part. My brother and sister ripped open there presents before I even sat down. My brother received a sweater, a spiderman action figure, and a dreamcast. Without any hesitaion he began playing with his toys . My sister received pink pairs of pants, a Barbie cash register, a purse, and $15.00. She then waited for me to open my presents and so I did. I received $25.00, a book, 2 shirts and 2 pair of pants. I was happy and very thankful for all of this. Afterwards we planned on going to our cousins house. My grandma was there too. When I enetered the first thing I noticed was all the food that was set on the table. There were Christmas cakes, turkey, gravy, mashed potatoes, chicken, and lots of other yummy food to eat. My favorite food was my grandma's home made soft and chewy chocolate cookie. They were warm and delicious. Later on we all sat around the table. We were eating, talking and laughing. That just felt heart whelming. I would never forget that moment. It was a blast. Towards the end of the day we went to the mall and the movies. We watched The Night Before Christmas. The mall was pretty fun. My cousin bought me a teddy bear. It was lovely. We even ended up seeing some fireworks. They were very colorful and looked beautiful. Later on I slept over at my cousins. The day went by in blink of an eyes but it was a perfect day.

It's really good. Did you forget to add the end, though? Like what you'd like for Christmas this year, and saying bye?

yep :D

yea

beautiful story...

Very nice. :)

its awesome.

Yah...but you need to transition from one sentence to another better..