What do you think? ok, i'm just an amateur, so don't chew me out.
this is just the first verse and the chorus........ and if you can give me a title, that'd be great too.
So what if i ask things i already know
so what if i smile and giggle, never for show
so what if i walk with my eyes to the sky
so what if i never ask how, only why
what gives you the right to crush my ideals
why do you stomp my dreams beneath your heel
have i done something wrong to feel your rage
to be flattened, and upstaged
Chorus:
i haven't done a thing
i haven't said a word
but even if i did
would it even be heard
no, I'm just a ghost
you push me into the background
i would fight but I'm silent
without a sound OMG I love it! (serious, I sang it and as I read it was awesomeness) Maybe the Title could be :
1. Ghost
2. Crushed
or 3. Crushed Ghost. zomg i love it!!!!
hmm...you're title could be like..well idk but if you think of one let us know[=
i love it and think it sounds really great. it's totally true to some people.[= I like it but it sounds more like a poem to me. Its pretty good, what I would say try new subjects more interesting. sounds good but it does sound like its a poem but change up the words a bit and it will b a hit!
It could be called
1. Ghost of my present Lyrics are ok. gotta get some music. I'd suggest "Why" for a title. Simple, direct.
Check out my tunes at my website www.frankworley.com Here's my suggestion which you may take it or leave it...
Title: Things I've Never Done at the Moment
What if I ask things I already know
What if I smile and giggle never for show
What if I walk with my eyes toward the sky
What if I never ask how only why
(Note) It would be better if the lyrics rhyme. Take time for improvement on the next... | 