Do you like this rap i made myself?please check it out?

Look at my life I was raised with my gun drawn
I grew up hearing momma singing one song
And Rodney King wanna get along
Gave up on Martin, we've been dreaming for too long
I grew up around coke in the crib
No lux, sheets poking my ribs hoping I live
Knowing I'd give my right foot to come up with the right hook
So I paint pictures show you how my life look"

ppl who dont like it are f*a*g whores..

very nice

It's Alright

6/10

pretty good! 9/10

well it all depends on the beat you hgave to the song but it is just my opionion but i think that you can put more flavor to it than that

you seem like a white guy from the suburbs

Sounds good.I like it. Very nice(^_^)

Not bad. I'm not a huge fan of rap though.

It's not bad.

straight...doubt thats your life but hey what can u do

"Knowing I'd give my right foot to come up with the right hook
So I paint pictures show you how my life look"

Nice.

no i think it was horrible, try looking up better words to rhyme and go together, it doesnt even make any sense either, better luck next time

It makes sense none-
I wish I could shoot it with a gun-
today isn't a day for you-
to sing your hubalooo...

in other words- don't quit Mc D's yet.

now its mostly nice until you came to the third bar(line) you dont make one part rhyme you make all the parts rhyme
nearly every single word ok dude hope i helped

It's Alright

Very good i give you 7/10.

But i would have to here you rap but ur lyrics are pretty good.

dat was colder than ice homeboy (as long as its true)

i look at ur rhymes with my gun drawn
puttin it 2 my head thinkin about what've u done
but i agree with u about u've been dreaming for too long
i can say u were brain dameged while u're in the crib
then grew up 2 go dope thinkin u lived
and i know that u'd give up ur right foot 2 get the right hook and no1 need u 2 paint pictures bcoz we all know how a loser's life looks